Sun Woo Kim
Prof. Kyle Brebner
IERW (4)
7 October 2015
Positive
and Negative Effects of the Elimination of the Suneung Exam
The first Thursday in November is
probably the most important and nervous event for every third year high school
student and even for their guardians in Korea. That day is the Suneung, one day exam for university admissions.
Since the score of this exam determines the future of the examinees, students
have prepared and studied for most of their high school lives, even losing
sleep, to take this exam. However, let’s imagine this. What if the Suneung exam disappeared in Korea? It
would be very delightful news to students because they would not need to worry
or get stressed about this one day test for rest of their lives. If the Suneung exam were gone forever, only
documents based on what students have participated in during their high school
years would be evaluated for university admissions and this can naturally bring
some positive and negative effects.
First, one of the positive effects
of changing Suneung system to student
document examination is that students will get more chances to participate in
diverse fields rather than just spending time studying. To be specific,
students might need to fill their curriculums by participating in several activities
such as sports, volunteer activities, language certificates, and achievement
awards, and this will be a great chance for students to find their hidden
abilities or interests. One of the unfortunate facts about Korea’s
indoctrination, a forcing education method without specifically understanding
it, is that it is limiting every students’ potential abilities. No matter what
students want to study or interested in, the Korea education system is only
providing courses which consider as “important” and mandatory subjects like
Korean language and math. Thus, this limited teaching of few subjects causes
students the dissatisfaction of their own university majors and it turns out to
be that many university students in Korea drop out of schools to start
university entrance admissions again. According to the Chung-Ang Newspaper, it is significantly proved that more than half
of university students are not satisfied at either their main major or their
campus life. Therefore, changing the Suneung
system to evaluating only the documents based on students’ extra curriculums, personal
statements, and GPA will be thoroughly enough to examine student’s potential
and learning abilities for admission.
Although students get chances to experience
in diverse fields, this can possibly cause negative effects of unfair admissions.
To be specific, students who are economically beneficial have higher chances to
participate in diverse extra curriculum activities while poor students have
limited chances. Eventually, this problem will arouse another serious social
issue, an unfair admissions between between rich and poor. As we already know,
private education is always the hottest concern for parents in Korea, and this
is why the business of hagwon is
actively owned in areas such as Daechi and Mokdong. Even though hagwons’ that teach Suneung subjects will be closed, there will be numerous numbers of hagwons be opened for searching information
or counseling students in receiving the extra curriculum activities. If this
issue really happens, the problem is that not only that there will be no
fairness in university admission, but also that students who live wealthy will
get higher chances to get admitted in high level colleges while those who don’t
have enough money to fill good extra curriculum lists will get lesser chances
to get into good colleges. To support this statement, Chung-Ang Newspaper University Evaluation Research reports that
about 6 out of 10 examinees slightly noticed that during admission, being less
wealthy have some disadvantages in acceptance of the universities. Hence, this
example clearly proves that if the Suneung
exam is eliminated and university admissions change to only a document
examination, there will be a serious unfairness in admission and this problem
can show another example of economic inequality in Korean society.
Overall, when the Suneung exam is gone and a new admission
system, an examination of students’ high school documents, is established there
will be both positive and negative effects. The positive effect is that
students will try out many experiences in different fields and get chances to
discover their hidden abilities and interest in that certain field. From this,
it will be helpful for students to choose majors related to their future
careers. On the other hand, only students from wealthy background will receive
more advantages during the process of filling their extra curriculum lists.
Thus, this problem will lead another example of unfairness in gap between rich
and poor in education field. Since the obsession of academic elitism won’t
disappear forever in Korea society, the most suitable solution for this problem
is that government or the Ministry of Education should decrease the Private
Education by regulations, and create diverse “college entrance type,” such as country-side
resident student admission, multi-cultural family child admission and low
income family students, that suits for different types of students in order to
prove a fair admission.
You made some great improvements! You corrected the little mistakes and explained some of the points more clearly. The thesis statement could still be strengthened, though. Instead of just saying there are positive and negative effects, try previewing the specific points you will discuss, then restate or paraphrase the key words from the thesis statement in the topic sentences.
답글삭제Thank you Kyle!! When I actually read the comment, I actually thought it was written that my thesis statement was good enough lol. I totally thought in a wrong way! (I should've asked you that before I make corrections!) I think I get to know more about writing essay with clear thesis statement and topic sentences after this essay assignment!! Hopelly I get better on the next essay lol! Thank you Kyle!
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